Cover Letter Responding to Ad: http://jobstar.org/tools/resume/clet-ex1.p
1. The audience is Mrs. Robin Boyd, who works for Metropolitan Children’s Hospital in Philadelphia, specifically in the human resources department. Brenda J. Wilson explains thoroughly what she is seeking the job for and what she has accomplished in her previous job.
2. The first paragraph notes where Brenda Wilson saw the ad at and states the date and the paper she read it in. One the next paragraph she tells the audience why they should consider her as a possible candidate, next she states the contributions which she has made to the company she has been working for and finally Brenda Wilson talks about her relationship with her co-workers and her staff, she ends by thanking the reader.
3. She has chosen to highlight the fact that she has improved the company’s financials after having worked for them for fifteen years and that she wants another opportunity to better other companies as well.
4. I believe that the writer has made their main appeal with credibility and emotion. Credibility because she states all the examples of how she improved her company through hard work and emotionally because she mentions her whole staff always supported her decisions and she was always committed to them.
5. I believe that she addresses her audience directly three times, first when introducing herself, then when she is about to talk about herself and finally when she is concluding the letter. The potential employers basically know what she has contributed to the previous hospital she was working for, because she states all of her contributions in the cover letter.
6. I would have improved this letter by making it shorter. I think a lot of this information could be found in the resume as well and it would be making it to repetitive.
Unsolicited Cover Letter:
1. The audience is Jonathan Arvidson, head of the reference department at Henry Madden Library at CSU Fresno. Melissa Taylor the applicant gives information about her academics and experience working at Clark Library to teach library instruction. She is seeking to expand her experience and contribute to Henry Madden Library.
2. In Melissa’s first paragraph she talks about her education, and why she want to go back to be an assistant at Henry Madden Library. On her second paragraph she notes her experience as and assistant and instructor at different libraries. She also states how she helped one of the libraries with customer skills. She ends up her cove letter by thanking the reader for his time, giving him her phone number and email number as well.
3. Melissa decides to highlight the fact that she has experience working at libraries and that she is a person that has improved her customer skills to be able to understand and help all clients.
4. Melissa has made her main appeal with emotion. She has an undergraduate degree from Fresno State and had worked at the Henry Madison library. She also states that she always wanted to return to the place she decided to become a librarian. She also uses “Go Bulldogs!” as her last sentence.
5. Melissa directly refers to her audience twice; first when she starts her letter and then when she is thanking Mr. Arvidson for taking time to read her cover letter.
6. I might have improved the letter by removing “Go Bulldogs” from the end paragraph. I think it makes it too emotional.
Referral Cover Letter
1. The target audience in Mr. Henry Fouche, who works for Best Plans Publicity, Inc in New York City. May Davison is writing about a possible public relations opening in their firm. She talks about her expertise and the numerous jobs she has done in her previous job. She also talks about her motivation and eagerness of making contributions to Best Plans Publicity.
2. Mary Davidson explains who referred her to the firm and the potential job she could be applying for. Her second paragraph she talks about her current job and all the positions she has taken do to the fact that the company she currently works for she has done many jobs. Her third paragraph talks about her previous jobs were she prepared press releases and media guides. Her fourth paragraph talks about her employers recognizing her motivational skills and her ability to be promoted very quickly. He finally concludes, by telling the reader she is eager to contribute to their firm.
3. Mary Davidson highlights the fact that she has developed her talent and experience, and that she is a very motivational person ready to contribute to the firm.
4. Mary has approached her cover letter with credibility. She has talked about previous work experience and the contributions she has made to the company.
5. She refers to her audience in her first paragraph and her final paragraph when she refers to the firm.
6. I think that Mary Davison comes of as a little snobby when she talks about her self and her achievements. She could have mentioned promotions and recognitions of her previous employers in a more subtle way.
The resumes I have selected are for the purpose of getting an idea of how to start shaping my resume to make sure it is effectively set up to start selling myself.
Robert Ussery is seeking a position as account Executive in one of the country’s top industrial companies; he currently is a Sr. Account Executive at Accuri8de International Inc and has been assisting internal auditors with information needed, developed good ways to achieve healthy competition and has monitored the team sales reports.
Richard Anderson is an accounting student seeking for a position as an intern with KPMG; he has previous experience with several financial businesses, on his last experience with Wescom Credit Union, he was in charge of producing audit reports that included internal control recommendations, management letters and loan file reviews.
Richard Anderson is a recent graduate with a degree in business management; he has been manager at a Pizza hut and was responsible for communicating, developing, profits, sales and cost control, he also managed and administrated the store operations, including reports, scheduling, customer service and inventory.
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Influences these resumes have had on me:
These resumes have a good format in which I know I could base my resume. The resumes are very descriptive and I know they will help, when updating my resume. The action verbs that are used are helpful in order to further develop the action verbs I use in my resume.